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复杂句使用不错，句法规范；采用了简单的衔接手法，行文流畅；文中有几处拼写错误，应增加高级词汇的使用。
My hometown is a beautiful village and near to the Yellow River, welcome you here, my dear friemd . please come with me , we must cross the yellow reiver by a ship to reach my village , it's also a intetresting experience as the river is not very big but there is not a bright across it . and I will show you around to visit the interesting places . there are some mountains which are not high surround my village .we can climb amountain and to see the site of great wall and a smoke tower built to defend against enemies in the old times . when you stand on the smoke tower , you can see the Yellow River like a beautifu ribbon across mountains . you will have a strong feeling that the Yellow triver is like a mother to nourish the people living in this village . there are many local food you can taste and I am sure you will like some . you would have a pleasing travel if coming here . Dear friends , I would like to say it again , welcome to our hometown !
