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I would like to take you a tour to visit my hometown, Wuhan. Wuhan is the one of the largest city in China which lies at the lower reach of Long river. The population in Wuhan is about 7 up to 8 million people. The city has formed along the long river and divide into 3 towns by the river, where the First long river bridge link the 3 towns together. The climate and geographical layout that temperature in Wuhan can be varies rather cold and hot in the winter and summer. Therefore, the best season to touring Wuhan is the spring and autumn. In the history, Wuhan was established when Ming dynasty and there are many ancient building have been maintained since then, such as Yellow crane tower, Ancient lute platform. They are very popular place of interest for history tourist. Also you can catch the subway to Wuchang district, there are many universities and colleges if you wish to get some information about them. This area is mainly focus on education and attract many experts and students to visit. The subway also can led you to Hanyang and Hankou district where you can enjoy a massive and wonderful shopping experience. I hope you have a nice trip in Wuhan.