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I have the pleasure to tell you that I became a freshman. In the past few weeks, I had fancied a colorful college life. First of all, unlike formal teachers said, college life is actually very tight. You would hardly believe, but to get bachelor's degree we must obtain various certificates. Although we have enough spare time, we must run against time. Second, university is totally the society's epitome. In my view, whatever difficulty or situation we are confronted with should be handled by ourselves. It is these experiences that cultivate our independent personality. Incidentally, I have gone for my first interview. Fortunately, I finally become a member of “Self-Management Community”. During the progress, I felt extremely nervous; even I couldn’t speak frequently. Nevertheless, I think it gives me many hints that make me grown up and would lay a solid foundation for my outlook. As the proverb goes, “when the going gets tough, the tough gets going.” Only by undergoing considerable challenges and toils can we cultivate strong personality and capability.