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The online shopping has been very popular nowadays.With the updates of technology and internet,it seemes like that we can shop online anytime anywhere .Even my grandma asked me how to do the online shopping. As we know,online shopping has brought much convenience to our lives.We don't need to go out and spend a lot of time to search for one shirt or something.If we do this online,it just takes a few minutes.And most of time shopping online could be much cheaper than shopping in a mall.Even though online shopping can save time and money,but it also causes some problems.Sometimes we may received things with bad qualities,and some people may be addicted to shopping online with which could make them spend much more money than they really have to. I think online shopping is good to us,but we need to do it rationaly.It will be great if we could take the advantages of online shopping and avoid the disadvantages of it.
