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technology is rapidly increased in our daily,and then,a massive of information dissorts aspect of life,some of them contained a lot of negative messsage which might be damage to our mental healthy,but good news is that information open us eyes,find some special things happended around us,expecially in media，which pose information faster than before. but how can we refuse rubbish message to interfere by ourself, the first reason that I think that its necessary to expand the education,who have processed it ,which can use for us distinct what's or what's right.the second reason I believe it is very important in all society and individiual, a great law to limts the uncorrect information to district our attention,including people with poverty ,a wealth of information is more possible to improve their strength, in conclude,the information need to be possitive,the poverty people could benefit from is, the negative information is inavoidable,good view worth us to accept it
