文章用词灵活多样,高级词汇使用也比较准确;语句间的衔接成分用得不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;从句使用很不错,再接再厉。
Technology is rapidly increased in our daily,and then,a massive of information distorts aspect of life,some of them contained some negative messages which might be damage to our mental healthy,but good news is that information open us eyes,find some special things happened around us,especially in media,which pose information faster than before. but how can we refuse rubbish message to interfere by ourselves, the first reason that it is necessary to expand the education,who has processed it ,which can use for us distinct what's or what's right.the second reason I believe it is very important in all society and individual, a great law to limits the incorrect information to district our attention,including people with poverty ,a wealth of information is more possible to improve their strength, In conclusion,the information needs to be positive,the poverty people could benefit from is, the negative information is inavoidable,good view worth us to accept it