作者英语功底扎实,可适当调整文中从句数量;作者词汇基础不错,在高级词汇的积累上还要再接再厉;衔接词和过渡词用的很不错。
In this time and age, more and more people become university students, which brings about a consequence that it is difficult for university students to find a job not to speak of a good job. Toward the issue, the reasons are chiefly as follows. In one hand, students have their own reasons. Nowadays, many students assert that it is easy for them to become university students so that many of them don't focus on their studies. So when interviewers ask them about professional questions, they can't say anything to answer them. In this society, many families have only one child so many parents don't let their children to do anything resulting that university students can't endure hardship. I can say that many companies don't need these people who can't endure hardship and don't have professional knowledge. And many university students hold the view of that they are university students, so they are higher than people who don't go to university, then they should have jobs which are better than them. In other word, they can't receive jobs that they have to work with these people. Because there are only one child in many families, so parents love them and give anything they want to them. They don't know about failure and can't receive failure. If they are fail to find a job, they will lose hearts about finding a job. In the other hand, society just gets though financial crisis, so many companies have to cut down employees. Even though many companies need to take in new employees, they are tend to recruit people who have experience about the work rather than university students. And there are more and more university students, so competition among university students is bigger and bigger. But I believe that if you become better and better, you will be fight by many companies, so you have to do something to make you better. Maybe you have to exercise every day to promise that you can do many things for company. Have a good body then you can do your job well. Read more in your free time to make you up. I always think reading can make you perform well before everyone and let you know more about you job and how to do well in a company. The last one and the important one is to promote your professional knowledge. No company need people who can't work well for them. All in all, if university students now want to find a job, they have to have work ability, know how to get along well with people and so on. I really hope that university students can understand and study hard at school!