句式多变,多多练习从句的使用;文章层次清晰分明,但是文中很少使用过渡词和衔接词;作者词汇表达丰富度不足,也请仔细检查文章的单词拼写。
I have six good friends, Today we talk about one of my good friend, him very strong like fat ,We bouth laike taekwondo ,he looked very clever ,we are knew beacouse taekwondo ,he had short black hair ,he frome taizhou-zhejiang-China .now we are busy bouth ,a few not to meet ,i am miss him ,he is my best friend foever.