句式多变,多多练习从句的使用;语句间的衔接成分用得不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;文中词汇丰富度不足,拼写检查也要重视。
I have six good friends, Today we talk about one of my good friend, him very strong like fat ,We both like taekwondo ,he looked very cute ,we are knew becase taekwondo ,he had short black hair ,he from taizhou-zhejiang-China .now we are busy both ,a few not to meet ,i am miss him ,he is my best friend foever.