句式多变,多多练习从句的使用;语句间的衔接成分用得不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;作者词汇量有些小,要注意检查拼写错误。
I have six good friends, Today we talk about one of my good friend, him very strong like fat ,We both like taekwondo ,he looked very cute ,we are know beacase of taekwondo ,he had short black hair ,he from taizhou-zhejiang-China .now we are busy both ,a few not to meet ,i am miss him ,he is my best friend foever.