文章层次清晰分明,但是文中很少使用过渡词和衔接词;从句使用量不足;文中用词稍显贫乏,单词拼写还要加强。
I very happy you can go and visit my hometown.There are many trees and flowers in the views.These is a mointain behind the view,a pond under the mointain,there are many children play in the pond and swimming every day.My hometown a very beautiful place,you can see many farmers work hard but they are very happy.