有效地采用了多种衔接方法,层次清晰;作者词汇基础扎实;作者在句法层面做的很棒。
Currently, with the development of science and technology, more and more people are pursuing the extent of happiness rather than the money. Furthermore, money can't deal with all the problems but improving the abilities of ourselves will deal with the matters which make us happy. From my own perspective, improving our abilities of dealing with can decrease the quantity of difficulties in our life. As a popular saying goes, "happiness is not the absence of problems, but the ability to deal with them." We cannot avoid the problems when the trouble gets mad with you, as a result we should develop our ability to make ourselves feel happy and fine. If we still alive, trouble will never disappear in our life because we must earn for life and make friends. That's why we should develop our ability to deal with the trouble according to our life which it will bring more the sense of achievement for ourselves during this progress. To summarize, develop our ability not only for settling the problems but also for improving our sense of happiness when we deal with the trouble. At the meanwhile, we should realize a fact that the trouble can't be avoided so we should overcome the difficulties to improve the extent of happiness.