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Illustrated from this picture is an ironic scene that one flower, in the greenhouse ,develop flourish. However, it, when moved out of the greenhouse, swallowed by fair wind and sprinkle. apparently, the flower can’t stand these wind and rain which afford by nature. Teenager,nowadays, as it parallel have experienced something similar. It is deeply rooted in the mind of general public that parents ought to protect baby from any risk. But is this public view still applicable in the competitive society? Cases against this opinion are abundant and with easy reach. It is not surprise to see students of university lacking ability of independent, such as, washing clothes, cooking. It is not rare to notice that adolescent kill themselves, commit a crime. Given all this. What the hell happened to the teenager? I hold the view that education of family lead to the outcome. A lesson of the fallout of baby be over-cared have begun. How can we put an end to the problem? I reckon we should start with family education to change. Parents not spoil children but ought to offer much more opportunity to deal with difficulty. In addition ,department concerned could supply more chancese to advance their ability to avoid the result of flower of the cartoon.