文中从句使用不丰富;拼写错误偏多了;建议在衔接词汇方面加强积累。
Ten years ago,a lot of green trees around my home town.Fish playing in the reiver with their friends.Neiberhood and my house all were not new,people life were diffcultly.Now,strenght a lotof budings and shops,large cars and small cars across that beautiful stress andTenologe of devolement made enviloment morn than bad,trees and fishs of all dies.Cure pollution is nevours.