文中从句的使用的有点少了;作者词汇量比较丰富,一些高级词汇的使用也比较灵活,但要避免出现拼写错误;建议在衔接词汇方面加强积累。
Ten years ago,a lot of green trees around my home town.Fish playing in the reiver with their friends.Neiberhood and my house all were not new,people life were difficulty.Now,strenght a lot of budings and shops,large cars and small cars across that beautiful stress andTenologe of devolement made enviloment morn than terrible,trees and fish of all dies.Cure pollution is the priority.