作者应增加文中长句和从句和使用;文章词汇表达要更加熟练,希望能更多使用一些高级词汇;层次分明,但过渡词欠缺。
I have a good friend, her name is mary, she had a long hair, big eyes, small nose. She is not tall, but she looks like safty. Every day I go to school with her, and we do everything together. When I felt sad, she always accompany me. She is my best friend.