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Hello everybody! Now, look after old man became an important question in the society, ours company creativity Rebot of comply with the demand of society. That the main function has to do some housework in fixed time, time can adjust according to need and chat or playing chess or sport with old man.That's can deal with events in time , such as call phone to hospital when old man illness also. This is Rebot of we company , I look forward to that can help you in you live.
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