文中词汇使用较丰富恰当,但高级词汇表达还需要很大提升;作者句法知识扎实,可适当增加从句的使用;文章采用了适当的过渡词和衔接词,结构比较严谨。
Now, look after old man became an important question in the society, ours company creativity Rebot of comply with the demand of society. That the main function has to do some housework in fixed time, time can adjust according old man need and chat or playing chess or sport with old man.That can deal with events in time , such as call phone to hospital when old man illness also. This is Rebot of we company , I look forward to that can help you in you live.
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