2011年考研英语作文真题:旅程之“余”

语句间的衔接成分用得不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；作者词汇使用熟练灵活，但要注意避免拼写错误；从句使用很不错，再接再厉。

A number of people who were seperated by many small tiny cells nearby are facing towards the chilly CPUs to communicate in virtual world but not face to each other. Conspicuously,this is a horrible depiction concerning worldwide-used technology has an effect on our daily lives. Several facters weigh heavily for the chilly relationship kept between individuals who were stunk by the net of technology,yet there are two kernels suspended on the top of the list which should never be overlooked. First of all,the relationship crisis between individuals just as the case of the character of moderized relationship which constructed by net to net of technology which brings not merely the convinience and low cost of conmunication but also the indifferent attitudes and the distance of each heart as well. Furthermore,the overwhelming messages without ample supervising flooding into internet which engaged ourselves into countless entertainment or over-pressed business,barely can we pay attention to whom close to our sides,make full of our spare time,also wear us out.A good case in point is one of my friends who used to dwell in virtual space to play online game all day which resulted in a failure in making at it any useful appointment and low grades in final exam test. Actually, it is not the Day of Judgement!What are glad to see is the key word:"conmunicating". If the drastic measures would taken imediately, just as laying down true name discipline to prevent the abuse of addiction of internet,delivering the moderate outlook of internet use and ensuring the clearance and security of virtual space,we will surely face to the pros and cons what technology brings to us and we can get close to the world and our friends.