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if a foreign friend of mine is going to visit my hometown, the chief place i would lilke to take him to is the park located in the centre of the city. the park, which has existed before i was born, is the favorite place among the citizens. as you walk into the park, first you will see a number of sweet flowers bloomed around the gate in all seasons since the weather is always warm even in winter.then you will walk along a small river for a little while and then there comes an clean and beatiful lake on which there are svarious kind of boat shaped cartoon animals like mickey mouse, donald dusk and so on.after taking a boat for fun, you will come to a place where there are a grat deal of entertainment equipment, and this is the part i like most, because i can play and laugh without limits like a kid. these are why i will take my foreign friend to the park if he visist my hometown.
