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It's unwise to draw a conclusion contently when you see something or hear something. As the saying goes "Seeing is believing.",but the outcome should be improved.An old story can be pointed to this.Long long ago,an old lady tells her grandson that their viliage will have a disater .And her grandson believes it,then he goes to play basketball with his friend who named Tony.Tony makes a bet with him that he can't beat the ball into the role where the ball is nearly the role ,however,Tony has winned the game.He told Tony that today will happen something unbelievable then he goes home and buys some meat more than usually and tells the buffer the same words.The buffer tells this words toall of his customers so he sell out the meat fastly.In the noon,the square of the viliage are fulled of people,they are talking about what will happen today.They feel hotter than before while a weird bird is singing in the centure.Everyone feels unease,then someone packs his luggage up and moves the viliage ,more and more people do it .Finally,they put their village in the great fire just becase the old lady's words. From my point of view,it's unwise to draw a conclusion contently when you see something or hear something.We should sure whether it is ture.
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