作者词汇量积累很好,高级词汇积累要重视;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;层次不够清晰,文中很少使用衔接词。
How Do We Keep Healthy H1N1 quickly spread around the world. People also are scared. We should always wash hands and open the windows. We should wear a mask to keep it clean in public places. We should eat healthy food and do more exercise to keep fit. We should keep enough sleep, do not stay up all night. We should keep happy everyday. If you are sick, you had better see the doctor