句法很棒,若适当增加一些从句的使用,文章会取得更好的成绩;作者词汇基础不错,在高级词汇的积累上还要再接再厉;文中衔接词丰富。
If I were asked about my favorite place, WuHe would definitely come to my mind first. Due to WuHe is my hometown. It is rich in fish and rice. Located in the south China,WuHe enjoys a rather enjoyable environment and climate. The climate here is very warm which is very suitable for people to do some outdoor activities. My hometown is very beautiful and lovely too. Everywhere you can see the flowers, glass and trees. What 's more, in this city,I have lived for 18 years with my parents, my friends who have supported me. It has almost all my memories. WuHe is not only the city where I was born, but also the only place I have never been able to leave. I love my hometown. In a word, my love won't be changed, because it is my hometown.