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As we all know, it's unwise to put all eggs in one basket,but why it's unwise to do it? There are several cases could be cited to support this view. It's known to us that if a person is addicted to gamble that he will probably put all of his money and his house into the game ,however,he will lose everything including his wife and his home.Worsely,he will do anything to get money;for example,he will rob someone of his money and phone,break one's house and get into it,evee sell his issues;all this he did just to get money!In another case,a boy got a poor score in the term-over exam,avoiding his farther's bad temper he decided to change the score by himself.Unfortunatly,his mother found it and toll his father,so the boy boy got some bruise.In these cases,their behavior like put all eggs in one basket,but the man can find a job and the boy can study harder rather than deceive his parent. First of all,it's unwise to put all eggs in one basket,we should think-twice before we do some important decisions.