文中衔接词和过渡词使用的很棒;文中词汇表达不够丰富,高级词汇方面要多累积;文中从句的使用的有点少了。
I have a friend and she is beautiful. She has long hair and blank eyes other she likes reading book and playing game. We have meet so many years . we study in same school , we are both like TFboys , we have so many story .last day, we tolk about tv show , she like listen to music ,but i want to see a movie ,so we are angry with each other .