文中从句的数量太少;衔接词和过渡词用的很不错;作者能较灵活地使用词汇表达,但要多积累高级词汇。
I have a friend and she is beautiful. She has long hair and blank eyes other she likes reading book and playing game. We have met too many years. We study in the same school. We are both like TFboys. We have so many story .last day, we tolk about tv show , she like listen to music ,but i want to see a movie ,so we are angry with each other .