作者词汇量积累很好,高级词汇积累要重视;句法很棒,若适当增加一些从句的使用,文章会取得更好的成绩;衔接词和过渡词用的很不错。
I have a friend and she is beautiful. She has long hair and blank eyes other she likes reading book and playing game. We have met too many years. We study in the same school. We are both like TFboys. We have a good story about that last day, we talk about TV show, she wants to listen to music, but I want to see a movie, so we are angry with each other.