从句使用量不足,应增加从句和复合句的使用;作者词汇基础不错,高级词汇使用比较灵活;缺少组织,上下文衔接稍显不流畅。
The Celebration of Western Festivals In recent years, western festivals have increasingly aroused a great attention among Chinese people, especially the young. Concerning the phenomenon of Chinese people's interest in clebrating the western festivals. different people have different views. For one thing, some people hold that the celebration of western festivals has added more fresh and joys to our lives. For example, On Valentine day, many young people will give their gifts to each other to extend their love and strength their relationship or express their admiration. From this aspect, the celebration of western festivals provides a chance for us communicate with others and develop our relationships. In addition, the celebration of western festivals has also added some fresh blood to our traditional Chinese culture. For another, others point out that people's too much attention to the western fetivals will result in less attention to our traditional ones. And in the long time, more and more people in the next generation will have no knowledge about our traditional culture. As far as I concerned, I am inclined to favor and farmer one because I think the celebration of the western festival is necessary and important for us to keep traditional curture fresh and active.
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