作者词汇量积累很好,高级词汇积累要重视;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;语言不流畅。
Dear David: My name is Hua Li. I am is middle school student. I from china and live in Shang Hai. My hobby that collect stamp and to do sports. I enjoy learning English. I have sung a lot of English songs. My schoolmates want to know friends from internet. They hope to get some helps. I want to England for travel.