加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;文章结构欠严谨,基本没有衔接成分;文章词汇表达丰富度要提高,拼写错误比较多。
Last sundy, i palyed plants with my friends. They are my friends in daily life. We are the students of Grade One. we got there by bus. We waited each other at shool on that day. We are very haapy to play the plant. we buy many plants at starday.When we get the momntion. Frist, we clmb to the top. Then we started to play the plant. We spend much time to finish playing the plant. we feel very tired but very happy at sunday.