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Last Sunday, I planted trees with my friends. They are my friends in daily life. We got there by bus as the students of Grade One The bus driver waited us at school on that day. We are very haapy to plant trees. Many trees were bought by us last Monday.When we get the momntion. Frist, we clmb to the top. Then we started to play the plant. We spend much time to finish playing the plant. we feel very tired but very happy at sunday.