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provided that my foreign friend want to visit my hometown,I will invite him to visit the TengWwangGe. in the past of thousands years, TengWangGe did not transformed a lot.although the modern society developed so fast,a lot of deeply culture was always in there.TengwangGe was a famous ancient buldings in NanChang. it is a charming place,and a lot of beautiful and colorful buildings were built in there.Nanchang was a good destination to travel,it was popular by both of chinese visitors and foreign friends.in the end,i want to told my foreign friend that wherever you go,no matter what is the weather,always bring you own sunshine.from my perspective,life was like a box of chocilates,you never know what you will gona get.the word is so big,you can just go out to see some intersting things.