2010年12月英语四级作文真题:让孩子独立

过渡词很丰富，衔接词同时使用的恰到好处；文中从句的使用的有点少了；文中词汇表达较为丰富，但高级词汇比较少，单词拼写要也加强。

At present there have a large amount of parent that want to take care about all of their children.Like make choice, choose the future and coat. But it was bad for the child to independent, because the child will grow up and they must make choice by themself. But the parents limit the children to make choose by themself, that would leds to the children independent.So, in my opinion, the parents can take the following advice. First is do not help the children do they can do by themself. Second, parents not only give the advice for the children, but also can give them one cup of water. Third, leave them in a great enviroment like a close school. And, do not so worried the children, they will meet the best friends and teachers. They will help the children to comfort the independent enviroment.