采用了适当的衔接手法,层次清晰;作者能较灵活准确地使用词汇表达,但高级词汇的积累还有很大的空间;作者句法知识扎实,但文中从句数量稍显不足。
At present, Online shopping became a fashion. In my opinion, online shopping not only has many benefits, but also has many problems. I have much advice about how to be better to use the online. First, we should be cleave and smart that we can buy the thing we really need. Second, we can buy something that we could not buy in our city and instead of online shopping. Third, we can find a various things. There is much advice to kill the problems. First, be careful to shopping. Second, to buy an account that you can look twice or three assistants. Third, do not believe the false information. There is all my advice to face the problems, if you believe that, you would happier to online shopping.