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Memo From:Li Ming To:Mary Chen Re:hold a party Date:23rd,Dec,2008 The Spring Festival is coming and many of our collegues are thinking about holding a Spring Festival party.Unfortunately,I have to go to Beijing tomorrow and have a week stay,so I won't be able to discuss with our collegues about the party.So please tell me the date and place you have decided upon and what I should do to prepare for the party.Thank you very much. Yours Sincerely Li Ming.