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Years ago, my town was a beautiful place.There are many trees around my town.Water in the river is extremely clean and many fish swimming in it.The houses are low and the streets are narrow. Prople's life is different. But now,tall buildings and stores here and there, numbers of cars on the roads.However the environment is very dreadful, trees are less than before and the fishes are died out.It needs to be handled immediately.