小学一年级英语作文:Jim's family

正确句子比例很高，但需多多加强从句的使用；作者能较灵活地使用词汇表达，但高级词汇的积累还有很大的空间；建议加强过渡词和衔接词的积累，文章结构不严谨。

Jenny is my best friend. She lives in a big family. Her father works as government officer. her mother is housewife. They have four children. My friend , Jenny is in middle. She has one older sister,one younger sister and one younger brother. They are in China. She is living in Canada and working as financial advisor in Vancouver. As a professional woman , she is very busy every day, but when she has free time,she missed her family so much.