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I think the most effective way to train the child's independent ability is to let them learn to think independently. parents should not make all the decisions for their children, they'd better ask their children's ideas before making a decision. because in my opinion, I think the independent action is based on an independent thought. In addition to this, parents can make their children take part in some peer group activities by themselves, such as a summer camp, a community service. During the activities children can learn how to communicate with strangers, and how to take care of themselves. I think it is an effective way to cultivate children's independent ability.