字数:200满分:100分
作者词汇基本功很好,高级词汇表达也比较恰当;语句间的衔接成分用得不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;作者在句法层面做的很棒。
As is symbolically illustrated in the cartoon,supporting each other with their firm hands, two handicapped adolescents are continuing their new journey on the ground. Crutches left behind, they have successfully cracked the hard nut of lameness which might have confused the majority of the disabled. The caption indicates that "You have merely one leg and so do I. Helping each other, we can travel all around". Undoubtedly, we are deduced from the portrayal that the cartoonist is trying to attract our attention of cooperation. According to a survey conducted among a group of people who were in the same college class ten years ago, those who are ready to give their cooperation to others all have become rich or majorities of all fields, while not a single young man having difficulty in getting along with their classmates become an executive or a boss. Why those who are excellent in cooperation and team work tend to be managers or run their own enterprise in their later life? The answer seems self-evident. On the one hand, if you are competent in profession, but have difficulty in getting along with other colleagues or even your boss, you can hardly survive the corperation. On the other hand, your chances of success will be higher with a wide circle of friends who are willing to cooperation with you to provide with information and resources. It is my view that, first and foremost, we can frequently use the drawing to enlighten the juvenile to learn to cooperate successfully with each other. Furthermore, whatever difficulty or situations we are confronted with, we should have the spirit of cooperation and team work. Just as John Adams, the second U.S. president quoted from the ancient Greek Aesop's Fables, "United we stand,divided we fall."