题目:Computer and Man人与电脑
字数:150满分:100分
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nowdays,computers play a important role in our life ,we were able to do many things in computer,such as play game or read books.everyone knows that computer is very useful. but ever thing have two defects. with more and more people have computers,it is a fact that computers occupys our life time.some of us can not doing things without computers even that its can effects our work and bisness.some students don't go to class because of play games. form my perspective,only find a right way to use computer can we benifit from computer.