增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;能较灵活地使用部分高级词汇,有基础拼写错误,需要注意一下;建议加强过渡词和衔接词的积累,文章结构不严谨。
Playing football is my most favourite sport. When I was a little child, I was shotted by a flying football. When I was playing the football in the sport class in the medium school, I kicked the football to one of my classmates' stomach. So I was shocked at that time. By that time, I don't like the football. By chance, I picked up a football on way home. Maybe," that's a chance to me." I told to myself. I can fight the fearness in my heart. I am always playing football with my classmates. I like football deeply. Now, my classmates and me always training and catching football . Bacham is my most favorite football celibirity.Some day I can become him as a professional football player.