2015年高考作文优秀范文：登山活动

文中从句数量过少；文中词汇表达较为丰富，但高级词汇比较少，单词拼写要也加强；行文流畅，但衔接词比较少。

We have a hiking on the Daqing mountain on 10th, April. Everyone enjoy themself. I will never forget the hiking. Everyone is picking the bags. They'are talking all the way, talk about all the beautiful scenery they having seen. We have lunch at the top of the Daqing moutain. There are mapo tofu,fried fish, fresh vegetables. There's a temple on the top, we good wishes for us. At last, we finished the hiking, we'are so tired, but we'll never forget the memory.