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Hello, everyone, I'm Alice. It's my pleasur to introduce Nanjin to you. It's a beautiful and history city. There're ten perid in the Nanjin in history. It's located in southeast of China, in Jiangsu Provience. Population is 5 million. It's more than 2,400 years history. There're many famous top travel, such as Xuanwu Lake, the temple of the , the city of the stone. Many facturies and tall buildings. Have a good day.
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