复杂句采用很棒;文中词汇丰富度不足,拼写检查也要重视;上下文衔接稍显不流畅。
When a foreign came to my hometown , I will take him/her to NanAo ,which is a beautiful seaside place . It's very sepicial and good for our health .It has freash air can proved people to breath .It has many sea sight ,just like the north return line ,and so many others sea sight .