2011年6月英语四级作文真题:网上购物

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my viewes on online shopping as all we know online shopping become a kind of fistion at preasent. there is no doublt that online shopping has a lots advantedge but also have some problem,on the one hand it is convinions and can cave time we me like cheak taobao to chose the cheap and good goods on the other hand it may not same as we see online in my opinion we should buy some thing in the mall ,if we have no time we can shopping online.