作者能较熟练、灵活地使用词汇,建议要多使用学术词汇;简单句比重稍微偏高,注意文中的句子错误;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
in the process of the modern development. we often find ourselves in a dilemma.what is the most pledge to the succeed.the first and foremost is strong will. maybe you will defeat ,you want to give up in the way.this is the reason why so many people is not come true their dream.as the saying go today is dark,tomorrow is dark,the day after tomorrow is light,lots of people is give up in the tomorrow. as a student in the campus ,study is not only our duty,it also a way to rich my life and social experience .work hard is a attitude.not only for make money ,find a nice job.abuntant knowledge make your life more beautiful.today throw the book,tomorrow the future throw you!