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In my opinion, if my foreign friends visit my home, I will take her to go to Wujiashan where a famous place in my hometown at first. My hometown name is Yingshan. Now I will state my reasons. First, I have been done to Wujiashan several times in my life, so I can introduce it to my friend in detail. Second, Wudangshan, which it is a special and grand mountain I has ever seen before. In fact, it is not only a mountain, but also a good park. There are good infrastructure and convenient transportation. If you traveling here, you will see all kinds of views. It has most highly altitude in my province. That point also a reason what it is famous for. At last I want to express that I love Wudangshan, because it has clean water, several plants, fresh air, blue sky, artistic views, and so on. So I believe that my foreign friend will like here must.