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Holle, I am Mary. I study in a good school. There are many studens. My school names Yuying. It is very big and good. It has built ten years ago. It has two classroom duildinds and a big playground. Every classrooms are built very big. There are twenty-one boys and twenty girls. I like music class. Because it is very relax to listen music. I like taking part in sports meeting. So I am very good in sport. It can make me more healthy.