文中从句数量过少;文章高级词汇使用熟练,词汇表达较为丰富;不能熟练使用过渡词,基本没有衔接词。
People in modern society live under a lot of pressure, from education, career, or family. So it is important for them to keep a good mood under whatever circumstances. in the first part of your writing you should present your thesis statement 2.in the second part you should support the thesis statement with appropriate details 3.in the last part you should bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.