过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;作者词汇量积累不错,能够较恰当地使用高级词汇;从句使用很不错,再接再厉。
it is normally believed that we should spend our time on more meaningful things to enjoy our life. thus, it is held by many that the greatest use of life is to spend it for something that will outlast it.such an assertion, as it seems to me, does make sense when we come to academic learning and everyday life. when we come to academic learning,spending more time on acquire more knowledge can make us become more competitive when we graduate.for example, my brother Tony, a senior student who take a variety of courses during his school time,as a result of that he got a good offer when he hunt job with other students. in case of everyday life,it may do a lot more good to our health than we can perceive and imagine and promise a future of longevity if we spend times to do some exercise. for instance,my grandfather,a 75-years- old man,who run in morning everyday, can play basketball with me.and i believe that he is stronger than most of teenagers. to make my life more meaningful,on the one hand ,i will spend time on learning several languages because we are living a world that values globalization a lot. on the other hand, i prefer to receive instructions on piano,which can let me make more friends and enjoy life better. i do hope that we can lead a meaningful life through spending it for something that will outlast it,and make a better self to get prepared for the future.